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Maids or Mothers? Error Correction
Compare & Contrast and Error Correction
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Maids and Mothers
Compare and contrast having a house maid with a stay-at-home mother. In your opinion, which is better and why?
Work, children and preparing dinner are some of the concerns families with two working parents have to contend with. One solution to this dilemma is to hire a maid. Or is it? In this essay, I am going to compare and contrast about the similarities and differences between having a maid versus the option of a stay-at-home mother.
Let me highlight some similarity. First, the two options provide piece of mind. Having maids gives parents the chance to focus on their work knowing that things are taken care of on the home front. Also housemaids feel assured that they have a job. Furthermore, one could say the two cases are similar, because they both provide employment opportunities. For example, by hiring a maid it is much easier for a mother to take a job that may have early starts or long days. Final point is that it gives both parties financial freedom. Working mothers are able to contribute financially to their families and similar maids can ease the financial woes of their distant families.
Despite these similarities there are also some differences. The primary difference is payment. Mothers do not earn an income for taking care of their own children. They do it for the “love of it”. A maid however is paid for the care she provides. Another major different concerns the emotional health of the children. People generally believe that the best care that children can receive is from a happy mother. In contrast, maids may not love the children and in extreme cases, as reported in the Gulf News, they may abuse them.
In breif, we can see that there are numerous points to consider regarding whether it is better for mothers or maids to be at home. In my opinion, the best choice would be for the mother to stay at home until the children are of school age.
Word count: 316 (It's a little long but in IELTS, you will have to write 250 words for this task!)
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